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I never knew feeling like a puzzle piece
Was so good, on some Manhattan morning
It's still dark
And some mighty hand poured a pitcher of cream
Into the mold of a woman
The same curves, envy of sports cars and
The occasional expensive statuette
On the bed before me,
Marvelous and
Naked and everything I
Want and want to be

My knees are a precise
Foot and four inches apart and still digging into
Flower-printed flannel bedsheets
My face would be in the pillow if
Your hands hadn't found my hair first
This is crudity, this is the essence of the word
Fucking, you're an obscene cowgirl and I'm
The Madonna of sweat and how it makes everything
So much hotter

We're a cinematic dogma, you'll
Draw a cry from me that can't be uttered
In corner coffee shops
[particularily ones with live jazz musicians in
ten dollar suits with million-dollar taste]

What do you hear
When our chest are pressed together
The same gasping for air, the same
Plea for life, life, living that
People give in a frenzied hope, or our
Furious sense of pleasure

We're dying, same as
Fifty-cent sheet hospital beds and the smell of
Iodine, we're dying just as sure and we're loving it because
We know we'll live again
We always do
(Give me five more minutes and I can
Scream like I'm dying too)
Our pheonix-complex comes with
Skin against skin and curse words that
Your mother would weep to, so
Give me another
Spin and we can
Show the world how to
Melt
©2006-2009 ~gutterbreed
:icongutterbreed:

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aarrggh!

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:iconsoulverse:
Wow... you managed to paint a really sophisticated picture of something that people typically deem obscene. Well done!
:iconnimbus9:
funny, I was just looking through the poetry section, looking for someone to read and of course, I went right to your words without knowing it was you.

You've captured so much with this piece, an celebration of the erotic, with her beauty that's always tinged with guilt, and the odd associatation of sex and death

"sex and death were lovers,
they hide under the Earth
and in strange ways
produced billions of births"


-A half remember piece I wrote in college

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Long days and pleasant nights

~jef

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Pretend I said something clever and profound
:iconfrancees:
show the world how to melt.. wow.. and you do it with your words

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skinfidelity
:iconmoonlitsage:
Exquisitely erotic. A very beautiful piece.

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)0( Moonlit Sage )0(

Serenity isn't peace after the storm, it's peace amidst the storm.

Was that an earthquake or did I just rock your world?
:icongutterbreed:
you think the picture's complex, you should hear my philosophy on it.

hehe :)

--
Automatons gather all the pieces so the world may be increased
In simulation jubilation for the builders of the body of the beast
:icongutterbreed:
well then remember the rest, dammit, cuz i want to hear it.
you always point out bits in my writing that i either didn't know were there, or didn't count on it having said effect and it makes me look forward to your comments!

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Automatons gather all the pieces so the world may be increased
In simulation jubilation for the builders of the body of the beast
:icongutterbreed:
i'm having a seminar next thursday on melting - you should come, bring a towel ^.^

thank you for the comment :)

--
Automatons gather all the pieces so the world may be increased
In simulation jubilation for the builders of the body of the beast
:icongutterbreed:
aww, thank you! ^.^

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Automatons gather all the pieces so the world may be increased
In simulation jubilation for the builders of the body of the beast
:iconthe-looking-glass:
eeee!! i :heart: the details here, especially the one about the jazz musician at the coffee shop, or something along those lines...

so very well-said!!

:giggle:

~ kit

--
there were no good old days.

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